'Strewn around The skulls and bones Unnoticed, unheard' hurtfully touching. best line-'Dead from within' d perspective needs to be explained though :-/
Bro, there's nothing really to 'understand'. There are images in my mind that I try to bring down in ink. It will be unfair if I expect someone else to interpret the images in the same way.
Whenever you read poetry (btw this one wasn't really a piece), just flow along and try to relate to it. You do not necessarily need to understand what the poet wants to say. Even if you can find dimensions of your own, from your own life, you'll love it.
I've used pretty easy, though a bit abstract, metaphors. Won't be that difficult. Give it a shot.
Powerful writing. (Nothing new, isn't it!?) And well, as you said, you can't expect everyone else to decipher the meanings of YOUR words, and your thoughts in your way! But, nevertheless, I have always liked reading poetry in blank verse! (Though, I fail to define that!) Keep writing, chief.
This very mastery that you have to sketch using words so succinctly makes me a fan of this blog. Keep it up, brother. Reminded me of Kashmir again, for the second time in the day.
Hey! Read the comments (too). It's nice the way you've explained things to one of the readers, sounds comforting:) That's the problem actually, poetry is admired by all but understood by few. People often get disinterested half the way through the lines. In your case though, I enjoyed reading, it was short and sweet. "Purple petals of a black rose" enticed me the most.
Really nice and encouraging, those words, Nehha. I'm sure people might face difficulties in the beginning. I did, too. But once you start connecting, it's just a new world altogether ala Narnia.
'Strewn around
ReplyDeleteThe skulls and bones
Unnoticed, unheard'
hurtfully touching.
best line-'Dead from within'
d perspective needs to be explained though :-/
thank you, dear, for connecting. means a lot to me, you know that.
ReplyDeleteto explain, its metaphors and fiction based on reality: the present.
A sordid tale
ReplyDeleteOf a black rose
Dead from within
And the long gone
Screaming with stories untold
Leaves the reader
Riveted and awestruck
Such depth...
You managed to strike a cord
In just a few lines
*Applause* (:
great piece of work... but for a wrong context.
ReplyDelete@ Choco: Hey thank you for the wonderful comment! Untold stories get the depth through the continuous turmoil from which there's no escape.
ReplyDeleteThanks! (:
@ devil: why wrong?
ReplyDeleteNice piece although I must say, last two para needs to be furthered/refined
ReplyDeleteThanks bhai. Point taken. (:
ReplyDeleteBeautiful Lines!
ReplyDeleteActually, the lines remind me of recent floods in Leh.
The template looks awesome on your blog :mj
Glad you could connect! Thanks! (:
ReplyDeleteWhat/Who's mj?
Was trying out the MJ smiley..
ReplyDeleteIt didn't work I guess..
Oh ok! The embedded smiley form doesn't appear. Dunno why!
ReplyDeleteThe MJ smiley doesn't work in my blog too, thought vl try it here ..
ReplyDeleteVl try to fix d script and tell ya :)
Hail digital geniuses!
ReplyDeleteLiked the line "dead from within"....
ReplyDeleteExcellent piece of writing...
@ Sushant: (: (:
ReplyDeleteBro, there's nothing really to 'understand'. There are images in my mind that I try to bring down in ink. It will be unfair if I expect someone else to interpret the images in the same way.
Whenever you read poetry (btw this one wasn't really a piece), just flow along and try to relate to it. You do not necessarily need to understand what the poet wants to say. Even if you can find dimensions of your own, from your own life, you'll love it.
I've used pretty easy, though a bit abstract, metaphors. Won't be that difficult. Give it a shot.
@ Mukesh: Thanks bhai!! (:
ReplyDeleteThe second stanza, or shoud I say line, was so hauntingly serene....super work.
ReplyDelete:mj
ReplyDeleteThat's my favourite line as well. And trust me, its non-fiction in the figurative sense.
ReplyDeleteAnd the mj smiley didn't work for you either.
Well written. :)
ReplyDeleteWhy repulsed?
ReplyDeleteUmmm. The raging flood is my life here at XL. Obsessed with it and hate it at the same time.
ReplyDeleteVery abstruse but a repeat read gave me some perspective. Loved the images you sketched.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful imagery. Painful words.
ReplyDeleteThanks, nilanjana.
ReplyDeleteSuccinct and powerful, your forte bugger....
ReplyDeleteI probably liked the mystique the best, left to think.
ReplyDelete@ Abhishek: Thanks, brother!
ReplyDelete@ Sapna: Isn't that always the best part about any piece?
ReplyDeleteReminds me of many a pains.... still worth appreciating
ReplyDeletePowerful writing. (Nothing new, isn't it!?) And well, as you said, you can't expect everyone else to decipher the meanings of YOUR words, and your thoughts in your way! But, nevertheless, I have always liked reading poetry in blank verse! (Though, I fail to define that!) Keep writing, chief.
ReplyDelete@ Shourav: I'm glad you did! (:
ReplyDelete@ Arjit: True. Frame of reference is something we just can't share, however much we wish we could. Thanks man for the appreciation! (:
ReplyDeleteSir mujhe ye poems samajh hi nahi aati :( probably I don't know the context, hence didn't get the full meaning
ReplyDeleteKoi nahi sir, aapne padha ye hi bahot hai hamaare liye! (:
ReplyDeleteSuccinctly put and very picturesque and very mature. Good work, Varun.
ReplyDeleteI liked it.
ReplyDelete@ Shyam: Thank you, Sir. Coming from you, it means a lot!
ReplyDelete@ Prajakta: I'm sure. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteThis very mastery that you have to sketch using words so succinctly makes me a fan of this blog.
ReplyDeleteKeep it up, brother. Reminded me of Kashmir again, for the second time in the day.
Thanks a lot!! (:
ReplyDeleteWas it about something in particular or some stretch of wild imagination that just took me by storm?
ReplyDeleteKind of both! (:
ReplyDeleteHmmmmmm...deep thoughts expressed in so few words. Open to interpretation, I like.
ReplyDelete@ DP: Thanks boss! Are you on a mission on reading the entire blog in a day?
ReplyDeleteHey! Read the comments (too). It's nice the way you've explained things to one of the readers, sounds comforting:) That's the problem actually, poetry is admired by all but understood by few. People often get disinterested half the way through the lines. In your case though, I enjoyed reading, it was short and sweet. "Purple petals of a black rose" enticed me the most.
ReplyDeleteReally nice and encouraging, those words, Nehha. I'm sure people might face difficulties in the beginning. I did, too. But once you start connecting, it's just a new world altogether ala Narnia.
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